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a study in dialogue tags, part 2
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Where are my nuance fans at?
Last time, we got the correct answer to this question (and you can read the first part here).
This time, weāre talking specifics. The way you present dialogueāeven the order of the words usedāconveys different meanings. You can use different (correct) options to shape your readerās experience, which is hecka fun.
Here are six ways to write the same basic idea, along with what each one tells the reader. For context, this guyās name is Bob.
āI know,ā he said, smiling.
Bob is smiling while he talks, likely at the moment he starts speaking. Unlike the rest of these examples, this uses a dialogue tag.
āI know.ā He smiled.
Bob smiles after talking. Heās basically reacting to his own words. What a smug doofus.
He smiled. āI know.ā
Bob smiles before talking. See how this implies a different feeling than the last one? It shows anticipation.
āI know . . .ā He smiled.
Bob trails off, then smiles. This implies a pause, which makes the readerās brain slow down a bit. The extra white space above the ellipses is a handy visual trick for drawing your readerās eye to this moment.
He smiled. āI knowāā
Bob smiles, then speaksābut his speech is abruptly cut off by some other dialogue or narration.
āI knowāāhe smiledāāand more dialogue goes here.ā
The smile is an interruption of the dialogue. Note the em dashes, the lack of spaces, and the lowercase āheā; these rules are used across fiction in the United States. UK and Australian friends, we can tackle the en dash another time š
But do you have to follow these rules?
No.
Seriously. You donāt.
Letās talk about that next time.
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